Business Enterprise

On week 4 we started doing our business enterprise. The teacher who we are working at is sort our team. When we got our team we started thinking of ideas, our team called Moseys why? because Michaela start thinking of mosaic frame and she think another product that we can use and it was chalk paint. We started to decide which one we could use and we think it will be pretty if we do mosaic frame. when we started finding what we need we decide we should have a CEO and it was roxanne. We decided to have work.on week 6, 7 or 8 the teacher buy our stuff and then other people started there products and create it  on week 8 I guess we makes our product and finish it. on week 9 we all finish it and we just need to finish the advertisement and the posters. the next day we all fisnish and started post something on our blog B&E  after we finish that we started to play gumption. 

Writing

In week 4 - 6 we started doing our writing. My teacher told us to make a writing that convince our parents to buy our pet and here is my draft, my final, my feedback from my buddy.  

Draft:

I would  really really love to have a red panda. (Please give me one). Why? because I can keep them inside, I can bring them to school secretly, I can train her/him and lastly she will look like a panda (of course it will look like panda because it says red panda) and he/she look like fox in the same time.

It would be really cool to have a red panda except I can’t have one because it maybe expensive for my parents to buy. It maybe expensive at least I can show you why I want it, anyways when I’m always got bored if always go to Chromebook but sometimes if I always go to my Chromebook I got bored. Sometimes I just want to think what pet should I pick? or what would his/her name?

If it’s nice and sunny outside I could play with him/her and try to train him to climb trees like other red panda (I wish you understand why I want it).

Comment by my buddy (Lasa):

I think that you have wonderful ideas.  I think that you need to work on helping it make sense like how you said “I can train him/her and lastly she/him look like panda.” But overall it was a great piece of writing. Keep up the good work.

Final:

I would  really really love to have a red panda. (Please give me one). Why? I can keep them inside, I can bring them to school secretly, I can train him and lastly he look like a panda (off course it will look like panda because it says RED PANDA) and she will look like fox in the same time.

It would be really cool to have a red panda except I can’t have one because it may sure be expensive for my parents to buy. It maybe expensive at least I can show you why I want it, anyways when I’m always bored I could always go to chromebook but sometimes if I always go to my chromebook I got bored easily. Sometimes I just want to think what pet should I pick? or what would his/ her name?

Anyways If it’s nice and sunny outside I could play with her and try to train him to climb trees like other red panda (I wish you understand why I want it). I will be really happy if I got a red panda. At Least just one red panda I will be really really happy.  

This is my writing I hope you enjoy it.