W.A.L.T write a narrative
success Criteria
I know I will be successful when….
- The title is suitable for the text.
- The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened
- The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
- The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
This week in writing I have been writing about a space chimp. This is my draft of my story.
My space adventure
5 , 4 ,3 ,2 ,1 , BLAST OFF! It’s is 1961 Jack was go in space and Jack so nervous and boom Carlo said “What is that Jack? “We here in the space but we trap”, say Jack. “I scare”, said Carlo. He was little and he sleep and Jack was go in the space and Jack was looking the
Space. Carlo touch a button in rocket he didn't know what’s it does. Carlo thought the
Bottom was toy and Jack was said no!!! Jack and Carlo was crying and Carlo said Jack!!!!
Carlo said “I want banana “. He see the phone. He call Jack on the phone and Jack said are you OK? Carlo said yes but i scare. What are you scaring? said Jack. Carlo said but there are no banana and no air and so hot in the sun. Carlo was grow up and Carlo was don't know what's going on said Carlo was don’t no what's happened Carlo said what’s happened in my brain said Carlo i remember is Jack .
65 years later…
Carlo was sleep in long years and he wake up and he see a light it’s milky way and he see the photo of Jack and me and i see the earth a landing in the earth and I want to see Jack in earth If I see in earth said Carlo and Carlo was landing in the earth Carlo was shaking in rocket and Carlo was thinking Jack was in the earth and they happy but the matter in Carlo was see earth and he said Carlo what happened this earth said Carlo and this earth . Jack came
Back said Carlo WHY! WHY! WHY! Happened here in the world Carlo said i remember all said I was a baby have a button i pull said and Carlo in space but
my heart is beating like a gam because Jack was lost in space sorry Jack push the button sorry sorry Carlo said i be crazy said Carlo so so sorry Jack .photo said Carlo. But Jack was. WHY I GONNA DO THIS I’ AM BE CRAZY said Carlo. I Am Sorry Sorry Jack bye bye Jack . And Carlo was so a man and he said are you broke this planet said Carlo said the man said no I go this planet and I so
this broke and I cry then I be angry this people said Carlo and the Man
And 5 years later…
And the man and Carlo was knock in the door said the kid how are you are my clown said the kid no . I am Carlo and this my Friend OK said the kid but come our house said the kid and said Carlo was said are you so kind full kid said the kid thank you.
The kid said this is my room said the kid and my mom was cooking in the kitchen and my birthday said the kid . Carlo said I be clown said man me too and Carlo was be friendly and the finish the Birthday was Carlo can I sleep here said the kid yes . Carlo was wake up and he so sick and Carlo and . the kid wake up and the kid said are you OK kid said Carlo said you so kind. Then kid said I said to mom you have sick mom said yes and Carlo was sleeping and kid said wake up Carlo said thank you kid said your welcome and I want to be your friend Carlo said I want your friend kid said I want your family your now my family …. And happily ever after
The End
