I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Namaskaram(hello) Alliah, I’m Joel and I am at Hornby Primary School . I enjoyed the part when you described your cinquain poetry dlo about friends. Did you know the facts you have used were really awesome and i couldn't even stop reading it. Next time you could use more describing and juicy words. Did you think of using more detailed words in your poem?
Hi Alliah I like the pictures and writing that your write even though what do you mean about you'll neve smile again but anyway keep doing the good work and good job
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ReplyDeleteNamaskaram(hello) Alliah, I’m Joel and I am at Hornby Primary School . I enjoyed the part when you described your cinquain poetry dlo about friends. Did you know the facts you have used were really awesome and i couldn't even stop reading it. Next time you could use more describing and juicy words. Did you think of using more detailed words in your poem?
ReplyDeletei really like how you write your cinquain
ReplyDeleteHi Alliah I like the pictures and writing that your write even though what do you mean about you'll neve smile again but anyway keep doing the good work and good job
ReplyDeletehi jolly thank you but that you never smile again thing is just a picture
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